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Update of Hybrid Book One

Journal Entry: Sat Aug 29, 2015, 2:28 PM
  • Mood: Dumbfounded
  • Listening to: Amaranthe
  • Reading: Black Science


Hey guys,

I had removed the first chapters of the first Hybrid book because it was not relevant to the main story. Well not yet. I am planning to write a prequel so I moved the first chapters in so I would later use them for the prequel. Here is the list of chapters in order of the first book of Hybrid.

Prologue: Hybrid, Prologue: The Last Battle
Prologue:
The Last Battle
  In a room filled with glowing crystals, a tyrian reptilian man, Seiton, sat in his high throne engraved with gargoyles. His hands waved over a hovering holographic map of the Milky Way Galaxy. He laughed for black shades covered nearly all the map.
  Only this star system, Navi was highlighted blue. He touched that star for interface and an image of planet Okma flickered above the map. This planet had native ships flying around it like bees warning each other of danger.
  “Oh, Spacers,” the man chuckled. “All your worlds are destroyed by my touch. Your corpses are disintegrated by my footsteps. You don’t stand a chance in the universe. Now, my Titan Empire has become my galaxy against your world. You will all perish.”
  A spiky armored-Titan entered the room. “Lord Seiton, my men are ready.”
  His throne creaked as Seiton turned to the soldier and smiled. “Excellent, activate the relay

Chapter 1: Hybrid, Chapter 1: The Child
Chapter 2: Hybrid, Chapter 2: The Prophet
Chapter 3: Hybrid, Chapter 3: The Helbots
Chapter 4: Hybrid, Chapter 4: The Marine
Chapter 5: Hybrid, Chapter 5: The Escape
Chapter 6: Hybrid, Chapter 6: The World Leaders
Chapter 7: Hybrid, Chapter 7: A New Life
Chapter 8: Hybrid, Chapter 8: Aquamaids
Chapter 9: Hybrid, Chapter 9: What is he?
Chapter 10: Hybrid, Chapter 10: School
Chapter 11: Hybrid, Chapter 11: Half Human
Chapter 12: Hybrid, Chapter 12: The Museum
Chapter 13: Hybrid, Chapter 13: His A's and the Artifacts
Chapter 14: Hybrid, Chapter 14: Alpha
Chapter 15: Hybrid, Chapter 15: Helen's Diary
Chapter 16: Hybrid, Chapter 16: Helen's Close Encounter
Chapter 17: Hybrid, Chapter 17: A Fairy Tale
Chapter 18: Hybrid, Chapter 18: Hurtful Truth
Chapter 19: Hybrid, Chapter 19: Feidlima
Chapter 20: Hybrid, Chapter 20: Depressed
Chapter 21: Hybrid, Chapter 21: Adam's Discovery
Chapter 22: Hybrid, Chapter 22: Alexander's Nightmare
Chapter 23: Hybrid, Chapter 23: Training Season
Chapter 24: Hybrid, Chapter 23: David's Loyalty
Chapter 25: Hybrid, Chapter 24: Prom Nightmare
Chapter 26: Hybrid, Chapter 26: The Helbots Returned
Chapter 27: Hybrid, Chapter 27: Midas
Chapter 28: Hybrid, Chapter 28: Let Me Go
Chapter 29: Hybrid Chapter 29: Play God

Thank you Inna-Vjuzhanina!

Journal Entry: Wed Aug 19, 2015, 3:41 PM
  • Mood: Happy
  • Listening to: Amaranthe
  • Reading: Black Science
Chapter 2:
The Prophet

June 14, 2343

   Alexander woke up that early morning. He poked his head out of the window and looked where the star Vega was rising. He knew that the Prophet would be at the Jardi Meadow, but his mother would not allow him. Staying in bed, he thought, how can I get there without her noticing?

    Then he heard a knock on his door. “Alexander, are you awake?”

    Maybe if I pretend to be sick, she would leave me alone, he thought.

    Helen crept the door and went in his room. “Are you alright?”

    He opened his eyes as he pretended that he was asleep. “I’m still tired Mother. I slept horrible last night.”

    “You had trouble getting back to sleep because of that nightmare?” she asked.

    He nodded as he lied.

    She said, “Alright then, I’ll let you rest for a while until you’re better. Are you hungry?”

    He shook his head.

    She kissed his forehead, “Get some more rest.”

    As she left his room, he waited a few minutes before slipping out of his bed. He packed a few items into a bag as he would be traveling deep into the jungle. He poked his head out of the window again and his mother was nowhere around. Climbing out of the window, he slid down a tree and began his trek.

    Making sure he doesn’t make a loud sound, he stepped around sticks, twigs, and insects. He walked through a curtain of water-filled flower vines and got a quick shower. Vega's sunlight beamed through the forest as he traveled. To him, the forest was an easy place to blend in and hide if trouble occurs.

    Then he found footprints. Footprints had four toes and a thick back toe made by a Cobain. He figured those footprints were made by the Prophet. Hot on her trail, he followed to see where those footprints go to.

   As he continued, he cut through boulder-sized leaves that blocked her path. An army of purple ants scattered across and he waited until it was safe to continue. He had been on that trail for a few hours, but to him it felt like time went by fast. Then came upon a meadow covered with red and blue flowers six feet tall everywhere. Strawberries and coconut fragrance mixed into the air. This has to be the meadow, he thought.

    As he walked through the meadow, he found a stone stairs that go up the slope of a steep hill. Running up the stairs, he got to the top of the hill. There was a small wooden hut with small palm trees around it. He walked nervously as he was about to knock on the door. Chills ran down his spine and shook as he knocked a couple of times.

    Nothing happened. He knocked again and the Prophet answered. She shook by surprise as she never expected Alexander to find her. “Alexander?”

    He froze in fear as she knew his name.

    She puts her hands up. "Don't worry, I don't mean you any harm."

    "Are you a prophet?" Alexander asked.

    The Prophet nodded. “I am. Is your mother around?”

    He shook his head. “No, I came here all by myself.”

    "You traveled all this way alone?” the Prophet’s mouth hung open. “Why she’s not with you?”

    "My mother won’t tell me what I am,” said Alexander.  “So I was hoping you may know.”

    “Come with me,” said the Prophet as she walked to the back of the hut.

    Alexander followed her from a distance as they stumbled upon an opening of a cave with vines hanging down. A torch was hanging at the side of the cave and the Prophet held it as they walked down the stairs. Alexander walked slowly as he tried to avoid slipping on the wet stairs. Spiders crawled on the walls and he cringed as he saw them.

    They got to the bottom of the stairs. Then they walked down a corridor and made inside a metallic chamber. Surrounding the room were broken computer screens and panels hanging down the ceiling. At the center of the chamber was a blue glowing crystal ball. Alexander looked at the crystal as the Prophet hovered her hands around it.

    “What is that?” Alexander asked.

    The Prophet explained. “This orb holds the memory of our gods. They came to our world from the heavens and raised us to build civilization. As they raised us, but they all vanished from the fire in the heavens.”

    “The fire in heavens?” Alexander asked. “There was an actual fire up there?”

    “Yes,” the Prophet nodded. “The fire swallowed the gods and only stars are left now in the heavens. Many priests believed that demons would come and slaughter us all, recreating the heavens. As the demons would return, a surviving god would emerge from the gods’ ashes and unleash incredible power against the demons. Finally, the peace in the heavens and our world would be restored.”

    “What do I need to do?” he asked the Prophet.

    "You place your one hand on the orb, and I will place my hand on to it as well. Then my other hand on your head and we see the future," she instructed. "Are you ready?"

    He nodded.

    “Very well,” the Prophet said. “Let us begin.”

   So Alexander puts his hand on the orb and so did the Prophet. As he closed his eyes, he found himself in a city. The sky blackened as large ships blocked the sunlight. Then these ships threw fireballs down to the surface. The ground shook and everything got caught on fire. An army of demons landed and started shooting at everyone. Civilians ran down the street as soldiers stayed behind to fend off the demons.

    Then Alexander opened his eyes and let go of the orb. He shook as if he was stuck out in the cold for so long. His eyes widened by the horror of the vision.

    He shouted, “What is this? Why are you showing this to me?”

    “Alexander, that was a glimpse of what we would face in the future,” said the Prophet.

    “No!” he shouted. “This can’t be true! This can’t be true!”

    The Prophet said, “There is more to the future that you have to know!”

    “No!” he shouted. “I don’t want to see more of it!”

    He ran up the stairs and sprinted out of the cave. He ran passed the hut and down the meadow. Then he heard someone calling his name. It turned out to be his mother. Following her voice through the jungle, he found his mother at a creek.

    “Mother!” Alexander ran to hold her.

    “Alexander!” Helen held him tightly. “What are you doing all alone here?!”

    “I found the Prophet!” he cried. “I saw our future!”

    “You what?” Helen raised his eyebrows. “You were not supposed to!”

    “I wanted to know what I am,” he said still shaking. “The Prophet should me a horrifying future of demons killing us all!”

    Nadnerb and the Prophet met up with the two. Helen shouted, "What did you do?!"

    "I should him a glimpse of the future we would all face,” the Prophet said. “But I was going to show what we could do to survive.”

    "I saw the end of us! We are all going to get killed by demons!" Alexander shouted.

    Helen remembered Alexander's nightmare about the demons and his nightmare was his future. Her eyes were filled with horror. She and her own family were about to die. She couldn't let him die.

    "What can we do? Are we going to die?" cried Alexander.

    "No, we are not going to die. The demons are not coming after us soon,” Nadnerb stated and turned to the Prophet. “Right?”

    Then the sky blackened. Everyone thought it was the clouds, but when they looked up, there was a fleet of warring ships. Birds stopped chipping and the jungle fell silent. Then they heard the people of the city screaming.

    Nadnerb shouted, “Helen, get back to your home and grab as many things as you two need!”

    “And meet us back at my hut!” the Prophet added.

    “Come on!” Helen grabbed Alexander’s hand as they ran back home.

    When they left the scene, Noremac and her priests hurried to the Prophet and Nadnerb. The two stepped back as they had no idea what was going on. The priests’ robes were torn and covered in dirt and blood. They stopped running and bent down to catch their breaths.

    "Noremac, what is happening?” he asked as he was looking at the ships.

    Noremac got back up and shouted. “Where is Alexander?! We have to protect him!”

    "He and Helen ran back home,” he said. “I told them to come back to the hut soon. What is happening?”

    "You have to get them to safety,” Noremac warned him. “The future we have predicted for so many years, this storm has arrived.”

    Nadnerb and the Prophet stood motionless as Noremac said it. They all looked up as the ships started firing upon their city.
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Chapter 1:
Alexander

June 12, 2343

   On the deck of a large tree house in the Chartorla rainforest, Helen’s eight year old son Alexander sat on her lap. His ocean blue eyes stared blankly as he was awed by the twinkling stars in the night sky. Helen stroked his spiky white hair. Helen looked at the sky for a second and sighed sadly. She looked away as the sky reminded her of someone she lost.

    “Mother, what’s wrong?” Alexander asked her.

    “I’m tired,” Helen lied. “I think it’s time to go to bed.”

    The boy nodded as she took him to his bedroom. They walked around his wooden toys scattered all over the floor. His closet opened with a tunic hanging on the door. Cool air blew through his window Helen folded the blankets open and he jumped into bed.

    "The night sky is so beautiful," said Alexander as he was tucked in.

    "It is," Helen agreed.

    "What is up there?" he asked.

    Helen didn’t answer.

   "Maybe you will someday," she mumbled as she turned her head away from the window. She could still hear the shouting and wails of people being slaughtered. Her left hand shook as if someone was still firmly clinging on to her.

   "Mother, are you ok?" Alexander asked feeling worried.

   She shook her head. "I'm fine. I am just thinking about a story to tell you."

   "Oh great!" he beamed. "I love listening to your stories!"

   "Alright," she smiled. "This story is about a warrior who ventured out across the sea to rescue a mermaid."

   As the story put him to sleep, Helen stepped into her bedroom, she untied her purple robe and hung it in a closet. She then took out a white night gown and put it on. Laying on her nightstand was an amulet in a shape of two golden hands holding a deep blue diamond. She picked it up and sat down to look at it.

    Looking at it, she could hear her beloved’s voice. She could remember the time they met for the first time. The times they spent together flown through her mind. Tears build up as she remembered his last words to her. She stepped toward his window and looked up the sky again. Looking at the night sky made her think of her long lost love. She leaned her head against the window and a tear ran down her cheek. "Fabocusa, I wish you were still with me."

    She wiped the tear off her cheek. “How can I tell Alexander? How can I tell him what he is?”

    She held the amulet firmly to her chest thinking how her son would react. She thought, if I tell him, I’d lose him. He wouldn't understand me, not while still a child.

    Then Alexander burst into her room with tears running down his face. He jumped onto his mother's lap, buried his head into her chest, and sobbed.

   "Alexander, what is wrong?" she asked as she patted his head.

   "Everything was on fire! Our house was on fire; everyone was dead, the sky was black, I was being chased by monsters!" Alexander sobbed.

   Helen's heart fluttered as Alexander described his dream. The images of her traumatic event flashed in her mind. She held him tightly and she too panicked. She took a couple deep breaths as she tried to calm him down.

    He continued to cry. “The monsters are going to kill us!”

    "Shhhhh. No they’re not," she whispered into his ear. “There are no such things as monsters.”

    He shook. “Are you sure?”

    She nodded. “No monster would be after us. It was just a dream. I won’t anyone hurt you.”

    He looked up. “Promise?”

    She nodded. “I promise.”

    "Ok," said Alexander. “Can I sleep in your bed tonight? I don’t want to be alone.”

    “Yes,” she said as she put the blankets over him and kissed him on the forehead. “No matter what will happen, I’ll be here for you.”

    “Thank you,” he hugged his mother. Finally he went back to sleep.

                                                **********

    The next morning after breakfast, Helen and Alexander went into the jungle to collect fruit. Thick pink vines grew all over the jungle. Feathered monkeys with four arms swinging from treetop to treetop. Butterflies and birds flew over flowers the size of boulders blooming. The scent of the jungle smelled like hot cologne. The Vega star released rays of sunlight, which beamed into the jungle floor.

   Alexander jumped over roots and chased a couple of butterflies. After that he collected a couple of flowers. An old male Cobain farmer sat on a rock chopping up bowling ball sized fruits with a machete. He appeared as a reptilian humanoid with long silver hair, wearing a purple tunic. When he saw the boy, he smiled, and chopped one of his fruits in half. He handed the chopped fruit to Alexander. Alexander thanked the farmer and hopped away while sucking on the juice.

    As they continued to walk down the road, Alexander pointed to the top of a tree. "Mother, there’s a lot of strapples on top of that tall tree.”    

    "Do you think you can get them all?" asked Helen.

    "Sure!" As soon as he said it, he climbed up the tree like a monkey. No one could ever climb like him. She knew that he had abilities out of anyone's imagination.

    When he slid down, she smiled at him and said, "You are amazing!"

    "Thanks Mother!" he said.

    "All of this fruit will last us for about two weeks. You make me so happy every day!" she said.

    "Thanks! But I am wondering why we're different from uncle and everyone else?" Alexander asked.

    She almost dropped the basket when she heard his question. She knew the answer, but she felt like he wasn't ready to hear that answer. So she was trying to come up with a lie that sounded truthful.

   "Well there are different kinds of people, your uncle and the people of this city are one race. The other races live on the other side of the world," she lied.

   "Well can we meet with them?" he asked.

   "When you get older, you can meet them," she said.

   "How come my father is not here with us?" he asked another serious question.

   Helen paused and froze trying to come up with another good lie. She took a deep breath and said sadly, "The reason your father is not with us is because he died of a sickness as soon as I became pregnant with you. Your uncle Nadnerb looked after me throughout my pregnancy."

   "I really don't know my father very well," he said. "Could you tell me more about him?"

   "I will tell you later," she said. "Right now, I would like to teach you the alphabet."

   "Ok," he agreed and they headed back to the house.

                                      **********

   Meanwhile, a male Cobain in a purple tunic named Nadnerb entered with city to visit the Great Cathedral. Down the market, the Cobains placed their wooden carts at the sides of the streets to sell their goods. A few offered fish, fruits, meats, and vegetables. They wore variation of tunics, cloaks, and togas. A couple of them had giant furry lizards pulling their carts around. The children ran around playing with balls made of socks.  

   The Cathedral was two stories high with one side showing their gods creating the heaven and life. The other side of the Cathedral showed them fighting off, imprisoning demons in their Underworld. Each corner had a clock tower with a god spreading its wings at the top as if it was spreading light over the Cobain world.

   When he got inside the cathedral, he walked down the cold stone stairs. The place became dark as he reached the bottom of the stairs. Water dripped down from the ceiling in the tunnel. He entered a chamber lit with melting candles. Cobain priests in brown cloaks looked up the engraved stone dome ceiling.

    One cloaked priest pulled her hood as she greeted Nadnerb. "Welcome Nadnerb."

    “Thank you Noremac,” Nadnerb nodded. “Why was I summoned here?”

    Noremac explained. “Ever since Helen and Alexander came to this world, we had you look after them since he was born. What do you see in him?”

    Nadnerb said, “I really don’t know. He and Helen are completely different from us. He has some super speed and strength for a child. That is all I see in him.”

    Noremac looked back up the ceiling. “This dome tells us the story of our gods. As they created this world, we rose from the soils. They gave us water to drink, game to hunt for food. They taught us how to build farms, then villages, then towns, and finally cities. They have always been living over us for thousands of years.”

    “How can Alexander be part of this?” Nadnerb asked.

    “Look at this statue,” Noremac walked up to a statue of a snow-skinned man wearing a toga and holding a spear. “This boy has resembles of the gods who looked over us.”

    Nadnerb said, “I don’t understand why we can’t see the gods anymore.”

    Noremac looked back at the ceiling again. “As we raised our rises with their help, a great fire shined bright throughout the sky and our world. We hid underground as it happened. As the fire in the sky was out, the gods were gone. The loss of the gods plagued us, fearing that the demons would break free from the Underworld and conquer the sky. We kept praying for the gods to come back, hoping that the demons would run back away.”

    “The great fire consumed the sky thousands of years ago,” said Nadnerb. “The demons would have arrived by now.”

    “But they may arrive,” said Noremac with concern. “The question is when.”

    “What about Alexander’s arrival?” Nadnerb asked.

    “On the other side of this ceiling,” Noremac continued. “There is another picture to this future. Here as the demons consumes the sky, one of the gods return and descends down to our world. There this god unleashed all his powers and all the demons tore apart by his presence. The god hovers over us as peace is restored.”

    Nadnerb looked at the engraved pictures more. “So you’re saying that Alexander is the god who would save us from the upcoming demons?”

    Noremac nodded. “You must understand that this boy is the god who would save us from damnation. He doesn’t know much about himself yet. But when he does, he must know he is the chosen one. Make sure you and Helen keep him secured from outsiders. He must learn and control his powers. No one should lay a hand on him except his mother.”

    Nadnerb nodded and left the chamber. As Nadnerb walked out, a face wrinkled Cobain woman with silvery hair was waiting at the door. She wore a worn out leather robe. She carried a bag filled with divining tools, and no one knew what.

    "Can I help you?” Nadnerb asked.

    “I am a prophet,” she said. “I am hoping to see the child. Please.”

    Nadnerb put his hands up. "I am sorry Madam, the high priest orders everyone to stay away from him. He is not ready to know about his future. He's only a child."

   "But he is a very special child. I am eager to know what his future is going to be like," she said.

   "I am sure that the boy will find out about his future on his own. Now stay away from him and his mother," he ordered.

   “As you wish,” she lowered her head in disappointment and walked away.

                                         **********

   That night Alexander was tucked in bed, his mind kept racing as he thought of his dream last night. Why were the monsters killing people? What do they want with me? What am I? He couldn’t get to sleep, fearing he would have that dream again. The wind blew into his room through the window.

    Them he heard his mother talking to Nadnerb out on the deck. He got out of his bed and leaned against the window to listen to their conversation. There are things my mother is keeping from me, he thought. I got to found out what it is.

    As Alexander listened, Nadnerb said to Helen. “Alexander should know about himself.”

    “I can’t tell him,” Helen shook her head. “He would never understand me.”

    Understand what, Alexander thought.

    "I think it is close to the time that he should know," said Nadnerb.

    "No! I can't tell him. I am scared to tell him what he is," she said.

    "I know that you have been keeping this secret from him since his birth," he said.

    She shook her head again. “You don’t understand. I lived in the heavens. I was the only survivor of the fall of your gods. His father sacrificed himself so Alexander could be born. How can I tell him everything I have been through?”

    He asked. “What would happen if you tell him?”

    She lowered her head. “He would be never love me again and use his powers against us if he finds out.”

    “He would not,” said Nadnerb.

    Alexander retreated from the windows in shock. His mother had been keeping a secret about him. He sat in his bed shaken up by the conversation. His mother was from the heavens and he is born as the god for the Cobains. What powers I have, he thought. What is it about me that keep my mother from telling me about?

    He could still hear the two talking. Then Nadnerb said, “We must secure Alexander from others until he knows more about him, master his skills, and accept his destiny.”

    “Does this have to be now?” Helen asked with concern.

    “People wanted to be with him,” said Nadnerb. “There’s a prophet who wants to read his mind. She lives at the top of a hill in the Jardi Meadow. We can’t let him go there."

    Helen stated. “I can’t let her read the future until he matures.”

    “If you don’t want to tell him now, that is fine,” said Nadnerb. “Only you would tell him. You are still a good mother.”

    “Alright,” Helen nodded.

    Alexander thought, there is a person would can read my future? My mother would not tell me what I am yet. But I need to know what it is. The fortune teller lives at the Jardi Meadow, I know where that is. I need to go see her so I can find the answers.
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    (Chuck runs into room panicking.)

    Chuck: Guys, zombies are running into this building!

    Everyone: Zombies!

    NC: You’re joking, right?

    Chuck: Look!

    (The gang looked through the window and zombies with tentacles coming out of their mouths running towards Nostalgia Critic’s office.)

    Chuck: oh my god, their Las Plagas zombies!

    Tyson: Their what?

    Chuck: Zombies that are reanimated by parasites with mouth tentacles.

    NC: Does anyone have a weapon?

    (The directors shook their head no.)

    NC: I have one this gun with only 9 bullets.

    Chuck: I have a few weapons in my Buymore car.

    NC: Quick, get those!

    (Chuck returned with the rifles and guns just as the zombies burst into the building. Nostalgia Critic hides behind his desk as he fires his gun. Tyson and the others hid behind knocked over tables. Chuck calls the agents to get back for help.)

    Kasey: What the hell did you do Chuck? All the directors in Paul W. S. Anderson’s hit list are in Nostalgia’s building!

    Chuck: Kasey, we have zombies attacking us and we need your help!

    Tyson: I don’t want to die!

    Sarah: Paul W. S. Anderson directed the Resident Evil movies so he is the only person who has access to the zombies.

    Kasey: If the zombies are from that guy, we got to go back to that place.

    Sarah: Nostalgia Critic, can you guys hold them off for a while?

    NC: They’re everywhere!

    Kasey: Nostalgia Critic, you have to finish reviewing the movie or this country is going to hell. Got it?!

    NC: Yes sir!

    (Nostalgia Critic continues to fire at the zombies while continuing the review.)

    (NC Voiceover) The volcano spews ash, lava, and flying rocks into the city. Houses were being set on fire, temples tumbled, and explosive rocks were smashing everything. People were panicking and running for their lives. Jon Snow and Mr. Echo head to the harbor, but Jon wanted to get Babydoll before Jack does.

    Mr. Echo: Milo, this is madness! We have to go to the harbor and find a boat! That mountain is going to kill us all!

    Jon Snow: She risked her life for me Attitcus. Risked everything for me! Without her, we would have been killed us in that arena.

    (NC Voiceover) Without her begging Jack Bower to spare him and her family and feeling so helpless, you guys would have been killed in that arena. All thanks to that stupid, helpless, begging bitch!

    (NC Voiceover) So our hero Jon Snow runs bravely up the streets to get to the villa. That house is so far that it would take an hour to reach Babydoll. She was locked in a room guarded by soldiers. The soldiers died and her friend/servant couldn’t open the door. Jon Snow arrives and breaks the door open like a boss.

    Babydoll: You came back for me.

    (NC Voiceover) Well duh, I’m supposed to come back and save you. I am the main hero in this movie aren’t I?

    (NC Voiceover) The cliff collapses and half of the villa begins to fall into the sea. The time slows as Babydoll’s friend/servant runs to get to them. With slow motion and dramatic music, she fells to her death.

    NC: Well, that was pointless.

    (NC Voiceover) Kiefer’s soldiers try to get to the harbor and decided to block the street and kill people. Really? Mr. Echo tried to get to the harbor. But the volcano made a tsunami and the harbor was destroyed, leaving part of the city flooded. Mr. Echo runs back to into the streets as he saves a mother and child from that giant wave. Making this scene even more pointless.

    Tyson: According to historical records, tsunamis did occur, but there were mild ones. They were not that big that they would flood the city.

    NC: You get extra bullets for your shotgun if you tell more about the eruption.

    Tyson: The eruption in 79 AD was a Plinian type, named after both Pliny the Elder and Younger. The nature of this eruption is that it releases tons of ash and rock into the sky and blankets everything in the surrounding area. There were no volcanic bombs. There were massive quantities of lighter air-filled water floating rocks known as pumice. Most people who were trapped in the city died of suffocation as they inhaled ash and toxic gases released from the volcano.

    NC: I love this guy!

    (Nostalgia Critic tosses more bullets to Tyson and Tyson continues to shoot more zombies.)

    (NC Voiceover) Babydoll and Jon Snow run for cover as rocks fall from the sky. They got under a roof and wait for the rocks to stop falling. It would have been better if it was raining cats and dogs. (Cats and dogs falling from the sky.)

    Babydoll: Is this the end of the world? Why would the gods let this happen?

    (NC Voiceover) Jon Snow is like, “I don’t know and I’m looking right at you because you are so pretty.” They were reunited with Mr. Echo. He warned them that there was no way to escape. They have to travel south from the volcano. So they had to get back into the arena to get a horse in order to escape from the city. They decided to go back to where they were fighting before the volcano erupted earlier. Basically, they are going back to point A.

    (NC Voiceover) Babydoll runs to her dead parents as Jon Snow and Mr. Echo searches for horses. She goes alone with a blank expression on her face when she sees them. Then Kiefer sneaks up behind her.

    NC: How does he know she would come back to the arena? What the hell is he, psychic?

    (NC Voiceover) So Kiefer’s Romans are patrolling the basement of the arena as everyone fled from the volcano. He takes Babydoll away. Jon Snow and Mr. Echo fight his last soldiers in the arena. Why would they still be here?! Shouldn’t they just get out of the city instead of fighting in the arena? You got a motherfucking volcano in the background that’s going to kill you all! Think these things through!

    (NC Voiceover) Mr. Echo tells Jon Snow to rescue Babydoll while he stays to fight Jack’s assistant, who the last person was standing. So Mr. Echo fights that guy as if they know each other for a long time. This makes no sense! Why has a long fight if you don’t give us a reason why Mr. Echo had to fight Kiefer’s assistant?

    NC: Do I have to mention over and over that there is a VOLCANO BEHIND YOU?!

    (NC Voiceover) The camera keeps switching from Mr. Echo fighting Kiefer’s assistant to Jon Snow rescuing Babydoll from Kiefer. Mr. Echo gets wounded and snapped the sword. Now I would give one credit for this line,

    Mr. Echo: Let's see if a Roman can die equal to a gladiator. A gladiator does not beg!

    (NC Voiceover) He finally kills Kiefer’s assistant and fell to his knees as he was about to die.

    (Sarah and Kasey rushed back into Nostalgia Critic’s place. The zombies ran after the two and the agents swiftly shot each one in the head. The directors were then able to fight off the rest of them. Chuck on the other hand was getting strangled by one, but Sarah saves him as she kicked the zombie’s head off. Everyone cheered as they all killed the zombies, but that celebration ended shortly as a tall man in a black jacket in sunglasses appeared out of nowhere. The agents, Chuck, and Nostalgia Critic recognized him.)

    Kasey: (Aimed his gun at him.) Paul W. S. Anderson!

    Anderson: Oh my, I should have guess that the Nostalgia Critic would be involved with this CIA mission.

    NC: Screw you! We know that you were trying to kill those directors with your fucking zombies. It is all just because you can’t get an Oscar because of your super bad movie known as Pompeii.

    Anderson: Don’t mock me, Nostalgia Critic. The other way to win the Oscars is to kill you.

    (Kasey and Sarah got between Nostalgia Critic and Paul W. S. Anderson and aimed their guns are him.)

    Sarah: Surrender now, Anderson!

    Kasey: Or we will make you!

    Anderson: Piece of cake!

    (Nostalgia Critic continues to hide behind the desk along with the others. Sarah and Kasey fights against this bad director, who fights like Albert Wesker and Agent Smith. As he watched them fight, he continued with the review.)

    NC: I need to get back to this review before it is too late!

    (NC Voiceover) So during the chase, Babydoll breaks free and crashes the chariot into a building.

    Jon Snow finally confronts Kiefer and the two fight. (Darth Maul theme/Duel of The Fates playing in the background!)

    (NC Voiceover) Jon wounds him and a fireball smashes right next to them. The debris cleared up and Babydoll sees that Kiefer survived but what about Jon Snow. Few second later, Jon Snow pops out of nowhere and falcon punches him.

    FALCON PUNCH!!!!!!

    (Rewind. This is the move you should use instead. Jon Snow punches Kiefer Sutherland Dragonball style.)

    KAMEHAMEHA!!!!!!

    (NC Voiceover) Babydoll chains Kiefer Sutherland up.

    Kiefer: Bitch! You bitch!

    NC: Oh my god, his accent is gone! This is even more entertaining!

    (Slow motion) You bitch!

    (High fast pitch) You bitch!

    (Slow motion again) You bitch!

    (NC Voiceover) Kiefer loses his accent just as Jon snow was about to kill him.

    Kiefer: Wait! Wait! Wait! Who are you to do this to me? I am Senator Quintas Attius Corvus!

    Jon Snow: And what is that worth, Senator Quintas Attius Corvus?

    NC: Shut up and kill the villain you emotionless fuck!

    (NC Voiceover) But nope he leaves him there just as the volcano sends a raging cloud of extremely hot ash down to Pompeii. He changed his mind as he leaves Kiefer to die.

    Jon Snow: My gods are coming for you!

    NC: Oh come on! Just fucking kill that son of a bitch! Stab him in the heart, slit his throat, or stab his face! It is not that hard!

    (NC Voiceover) The hot ash cloud blows right into Pompeii and Kiefer gets incinerated.

    NC: You know, for kids!

    (NC Voiceover) Then it races towards Mr. Echo. Apparently, he is still alive after being stabbed by Jack’s assistant. Yet he was able to stand up and yell at the raging cloud.

    Mr. Echo: For those of us about to die, we salute you. I die a free man!

    (Kasey and Sarah kept attacking Paul W. S. Anderson. He keeps disappearing and reappearing. Sarah and Kasey kick and punch, but he dodged their every move. Kasey gets thrown against the wall and Sarah is knocked out cold. Kasey tosses a tic tac to Nostalgia Critic.)

    NC: What’s this?

    Kasey: Eat it!

    (Nostalgia Critic eats it.)

    NC: Minty!

    (Then Nostalgia Critic flashes in his mind and suddenly knows Kung Fu.)

    NC: Hey asshole, over here!

    (Paul W. S. Anderson and Nostalgia Critic have a Mortal Kombat battle, which only lasted for a couple of seconds. (Mortal Kombat theme music) Nostalgia Critic knocks him down to the ground. Paul Anderson wounded and pinned to the floor.)

    NC: I am ending this once and for all!

    (Nostalgia Critic threw Paul W. S. Anderson into a chair. He ties him and forces him to look at him as Nostalgia Critic returned to his desk. He performs his finishing combat move by finishing his review.)

    NC: Paul W. S. Anderson, pay fucking attention!

    (NC Voiceover) Jon Snow and Babydoll rushed out of the city just in time. But wait, their horse throws them off as it was too week to run. Jon Snow wants Babydoll to go without him knowing their horse can’t carry both of them. Stupidly, she kicks the horse away wanting to spend the last moment with him.

    Babydoll: I don't want to spend our last moments running.

    NC: What the fuck! Are you that fucking retarded?! He wants to you to escape from the raging ash cloud! Instead you want to die?! You barely know him!

    NC: Before we finish this movie off, let’s look at those great memories they share together. Jon Snow kills one of her horses when they first met. She rode with him out of the party to get away from Jack Bower. Babydoll dumbly spared Jon Snow risking herself and her family. Wow, those are such romantic memories! (Sarcasm)

    Jon Snow: Don't look. Look at me. Just me.

    NC: Remind you of anything?

    Jack Dawson: Don’t let go.

    (NC Voiceover) Yup, I thought so! This is just copying the “don’t let go” scene Titanic, but added a volcano to make it original. WHICH DOES NOT WORK!!!

    (NC Voiceover) So for the last second they had together was them staring into each other’s eyes and shared a passionate kiss. Finally, the ash cloud shallows them up. The last shot we see is HOLY CRAP THAT IS TERRIFYING!!!! (Jon Snow and Babydoll’s bodies encased in solid lava.)

    NC: Let me look at that again. (See it again and jumps in fear.) Jesus, that’s scary as shit!

    (NC Voiceover) The moment in the movie is a horrifying shot of Jon Snow and Babydoll’s bodies sealed in solid ash still kissing as their love became eternal.

    (NC hacks his finger into his mouth)

    NC: Are you fucking kidding me? You call this film epic? Bullshit!

    Anderson: But it is!

    Tyson: It is not scientifically accurate. The victims of Pompeii were not mummified by the ash or lava. They were actually made of plaster in modern times, from material injected into cavities remaining from bodies left in the ash deposits.

    NC: What he said.

    Anderson: Oh come on, you got to give me credit.

    NC: This is stupid! You did not put any chemistry into Babydoll and Jon Snow! You put more special effects and action than acting and storytelling! Kiefer Sutherland as a Roman, were you on drugs?! This action was dumb! Jon Snow was still Jon Snow! I don’t know what you were trying to do, but you could only make Michael Bay jealous over this movie!

    Kasey: Not the finishing move I was looking for.

    (Kasey and Sarah handcuff Paul W. S. Anderson. Tyson gets to go back home with the agents. As Paul W.S. Anderson gets arrested, General Beckham meets the Nostalgia Critic in person and shook his hand.)

    General: Thank you for accomplishing the mission and saving our country.

    NC: Don’t just thank me; thank Neil Tyson and Chuck along with the directors. Tyson offered his intake on the movie and explaining what actually happened back then.

    General: Well thank you, Professor Tyson.

    Tyson: This was great helping out my friend!

    NC: But I didn’t finish review the movie yet.

    Sarah: You reviewed the whole movie and explained how terrible it was scene by scene.

    NC: I need to tell my overall of this movie!

    (NC Voiceover) This was a total rip-off of Titanic with Dante’s Peak and Gladiator. From what we know of Paul W. S. Anderson, the characters he creates are very pointless. The acting is terrible. We don’t feel a connection with these characters. Most of them have no impact in the film. Too much CGI was put on. It is scientifically inaccurate based on the tsunami, flying fireballs, and lava. The volcano was just put there to keep the audience entertained even though most girls drooled over Jon Snow’s abs. There are too many plots in one movie. Most of the actors were chosen for the wrong roles. We all know that the destruction of Pompeii was incredible. Documentaries and books have done well presenting this story.

    (NC Voiceover) So overall, Pompeii is absolute shit!

    (Jon Snow and Babydoll gets swallowed by the raging hot ash cloud.)

    NC: With that being said, I am the Nostalgia Critic. I remember it so you don’t have to!

    (Nostalgia Critic throws the Pompeii DVD far away where he would never find it again. He watched with awe as it disappears into the horizon. The next morning, Nostalgia Critic heard a knock on the door. He answered it and it was Chester A. Bum holding the Pompeii DVD.)

    Chester A. Bum: Oh my god, this is the greatest movie I have ever seen in my life!

    Nostalgia Critic: Oh no, here we go again!

The End
Nostalgia Critic reviews Pompeii part 4
I have remade my fanfiction of Nostalgia Critic reviewing Pompeii. The original fanfiction is right here. Nostalgia Critic presents: Pompeii I made my fanfiction so long that is it like 22 pages used. I went back to the movie and watched it on youtube and took a lot of notes to make my point why it is a bad movie to see.

Nostalgia Critic belongs to The Guy With The Glasses
Sarah, Chuck, Kasey, and General Beckham belongs to Chuckm the TV show
Paul W. S. Anderson is Paul W. S. Anderson
Neil deGrasse Tyson is Neil deGrasse Tyson

Part 1: Nostalgia Critic reviews Pompeii part 1
Part 2: Nostalgia Critic reviews Pompeii part 2
Part 3: Nostalgia Critic reviews Pompeii part 3
Part 4: Reading
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Hey everyone! I am Brendan also known as Bclement117. I am a science fiction writer writing my own science fiction novel called Hybrid. I have been working on this story for such a long time. I have been bringing this story to life by writing it and posting these chapters to this website. After I finish writing this book, I will publish it and write more books in this series. This is for all you fans that love sci fi and fantasy. Please feel free to read the first chapters of my novel. I am open to any comments and suggestions! Enjoy!

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Update of Hybrid Book One

Journal Entry: Sat Aug 29, 2015, 2:28 PM
  • Mood: Dumbfounded
  • Listening to: Amaranthe
  • Reading: Black Science


Hey guys,

I had removed the first chapters of the first Hybrid book because it was not relevant to the main story. Well not yet. I am planning to write a prequel so I moved the first chapters in so I would later use them for the prequel. Here is the list of chapters in order of the first book of Hybrid.

Prologue: Hybrid, Prologue: The Last Battle
Prologue:
The Last Battle
  In a room filled with glowing crystals, a tyrian reptilian man, Seiton, sat in his high throne engraved with gargoyles. His hands waved over a hovering holographic map of the Milky Way Galaxy. He laughed for black shades covered nearly all the map.
  Only this star system, Navi was highlighted blue. He touched that star for interface and an image of planet Okma flickered above the map. This planet had native ships flying around it like bees warning each other of danger.
  “Oh, Spacers,” the man chuckled. “All your worlds are destroyed by my touch. Your corpses are disintegrated by my footsteps. You don’t stand a chance in the universe. Now, my Titan Empire has become my galaxy against your world. You will all perish.”
  A spiky armored-Titan entered the room. “Lord Seiton, my men are ready.”
  His throne creaked as Seiton turned to the soldier and smiled. “Excellent, activate the relay

Chapter 1: Hybrid, Chapter 1: The Child
Chapter 2: Hybrid, Chapter 2: The Prophet
Chapter 3: Hybrid, Chapter 3: The Helbots
Chapter 4: Hybrid, Chapter 4: The Marine
Chapter 5: Hybrid, Chapter 5: The Escape
Chapter 6: Hybrid, Chapter 6: The World Leaders
Chapter 7: Hybrid, Chapter 7: A New Life
Chapter 8: Hybrid, Chapter 8: Aquamaids
Chapter 9: Hybrid, Chapter 9: What is he?
Chapter 10: Hybrid, Chapter 10: School
Chapter 11: Hybrid, Chapter 11: Half Human
Chapter 12: Hybrid, Chapter 12: The Museum
Chapter 13: Hybrid, Chapter 13: His A's and the Artifacts
Chapter 14: Hybrid, Chapter 14: Alpha
Chapter 15: Hybrid, Chapter 15: Helen's Diary
Chapter 16: Hybrid, Chapter 16: Helen's Close Encounter
Chapter 17: Hybrid, Chapter 17: A Fairy Tale
Chapter 18: Hybrid, Chapter 18: Hurtful Truth
Chapter 19: Hybrid, Chapter 19: Feidlima
Chapter 20: Hybrid, Chapter 20: Depressed
Chapter 21: Hybrid, Chapter 21: Adam's Discovery
Chapter 22: Hybrid, Chapter 22: Alexander's Nightmare
Chapter 23: Hybrid, Chapter 23: Training Season
Chapter 24: Hybrid, Chapter 23: David's Loyalty
Chapter 25: Hybrid, Chapter 24: Prom Nightmare
Chapter 26: Hybrid, Chapter 26: The Helbots Returned
Chapter 27: Hybrid, Chapter 27: Midas
Chapter 28: Hybrid, Chapter 28: Let Me Go
Chapter 29: Hybrid Chapter 29: Play God

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